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9.19.2010
I could offer you messy ink on loose leaf. I could give you some beautiful words. Would you feel my tone? There's nothing I wouldn't do, to write how I truly feel for you.
I'm not quite sure what I feel about this piece actually. It's lacking something, not sure what. It has emotion, but not the emotion that can break through to the reader. Having a hard time fixing that...
I like this, especially the first line. I do feel a tone in this.
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